I have a Presentation a bout WAR (((could u help PLZ???)))

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Dear Friends

I have a Presentation about the war... I wrote it already but I need some one to help and tell me if my Presentation is good or not or if there is any mistakes are there or eaither to suggest to change something. I want to give it to my teacher by Monday and I hope if my Friends will be helpfull and just tell me is my Presentation is ok or not??. I was working in traslating but 1 yr ago I didn't practice writing that much,

I feel embarased from this request...

But,

If u will help me I'll be v.happy

Thanks alot Friends....



The War

Everyday when you watch TV, you see at least some of the following situations. A child born without father… A family member is lost… Bombs and missiles are destroying places in the town… This is the result of the war.

In the war people are killing with out any reason. People are losing their houses, their jobs and their life’s. But if there is a person who likes the blood, than it will be a different case. In this case we have to work hard just to delete this person from the world.

Who is Saddam?!! We can’t say that he is a human like others. He is killing people to get life, he is living happy and Iraqi people are dieing. I’m against this war but in same time I feel happy. I’m happy because Saddam will die, and I’m against this war because there are so many poor people are killing because of one person. In this time we can’t do any thing than looking forward, looking for a good life for Iraqis. And I hope they will get some peaceful in their next life. Although, after war we will feel that we lost so many things but at least people will gain a good life without Saddam. At the end, we have help Iraqi people and not to leave this war to be so long, because we are looking for peaceful.




That was my Pres. I hope its ok and if there is ant mistakes PLZ tell me I don't want to lose my marks on something easy like this

with my regards

thanks alot

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My sis Doctor Nada :

in general , your presentation is good , but it needs some changes and there are some mistakes too.


and just forgive me coz i'm going to mention them very quickly ...


1- i think it's better to say ( when you ever watch Tv ) , coz some people don't watch tv every day , and the new expression could tell me that you can see those situations at anytime when you determine to watch Tv .

2- you see at least ( it's better to say ... you can behold )

3- without father ( without a father ).

4- in the town ( in town ).

5- their life’s . ( if you meant the ..pl.. so it must be lives ... life is the singular and lives is the plural ) .

6- the blood ( blood ) without the .

7- than it will ( then it will ) .

8- just to delete this person ( in order to get rid of this person ) .

9- We can’t say that he is a human like others( we can't call him a human being ) .

10 - He is killing people to get life ( he is killing people to own this life ).

11- he is living happy ( he is living happily ) .

12- and Iraqi people ( whereas iraqi people ) .

13- are killing because of one person ( who are killing because of an ignoble person ) .

14- will get some peaceful ( will get some peace ) .

15- will gain a good life ( would gain a good life ) .

16- we have help Iraqi people and not to leave this war to be so long, because we are looking for peaceful( we should help iraqi people and try our best in order to prevent this destructive war ) .

17- because we are looking for peaceful( because we are looking for peace ) .


good luck

please , keep me in your prayers .

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salam

I don't know what to say more than thank u so much

I thought for a while that there is someone will help me but not this much


Thanks for help

Thank u alot alot


I'll pray for u always, & wish all the best inshullah

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you're welcome ....

and at any time ......;) :D

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Thanks for this Passage

Nice Noachian ..